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There’s Nothing Like an Apple by Mark Penny

by Patricia | 4.18.12

There’s nothing like an apple
Not a thing
In summer, fall, millenium or spring
The crisp, collapsing clutter in the mouth
Wet sugar squirting east, west, north and south


To read Mark’s other Spring Poetry Runoff Competition entries, go here and here.

*Competition entry*

9 Responses to There’s Nothing Like an Apple by Mark Penny

  1. Merrijane

    Mmmmm. I like how you’ve put “millenium” in the spot where winter should go. Seems like a thousand years, doesn’t it?

  2. Th.


    I totally agree—that word made the poem my favorite thing today.

  3. Will Reger

    “Collapsing clutter” is the perfect phrase for what happens in the mouth when eating a really good apple.

  4. Mark

    You can thank a long string of really tasty apples for this one.

    I like those bits, too. I don’t know where “millennium” came from, but it fit right in. For me it has a real “After Apple Picking” feel. “Collapsing clutter” pleases me, too–on the page or in the mouth.

    Should I change “squirting” to “shooting”, though? More of a fireworky feel.

  5. Sarah Dunster

    The apple in this poem, for me, is green…one of those sweet green apples.

  6. Merrijane

    “Sugar shooting” has a nice alliteration. Although “squirting” really gets the saliva flowing. I’d say that’s a toss up.

  7. Mark

    Sounds like a leave-as. Thanks for the input, folks.

  8. Will Reger

    “Squirting” gives more the sense that the wet sugar is under the duress of teeth and tongue, more a sense of lushness, of the natural accident of being crushed and having juice fly everywhere as a consequence.

  9. Mark

    That clinches it. Thanks, Will.

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